They found the story entertaining, but not enough of a storyline. Although there's lots going on, I can see that the storyline seems incidental. I've been thinking for a while that I need something meatier... or at least to make changes to make it more than "not really science fiction". To that end, I'm gonna crank up the murder mystery aspect, and I'm trying to come up with a new title the emphasizes the mystery. Perhaps "Murder, she saw"?
Don't worry... the blonde bimbos aren't going away.
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