Unfortunately, I'm going to have to go back and edit chapter 1 a bit. A character who is supposed to be fairly young seemed like a stuffy old man of 50. *sigh* He is supposed to seem stuffy, but not old.
In my first rewrite of the opening, I cut a scene that shows one of Manon's good points. I should probably find a way to work it back in, as ficbot found the character a bit annoying.